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A False Warrior ( )

Postby #Chance on Sat Dec 31, 2011 4:46 am

Authors note: Here it goes, third poem in two days. Would like CnC like always.
Song: Liar, Liar - Never Shout Never

A False Warrior
You are a liar.
A pompous, walking, worthless swine that sports divine youth in an insolent stance.
You are a conniving snake who makes a mockery of me and my worth.
It’s been three hours since you left, driven me to my death,
At the edge of this cliff with a stiff hand on a blade that calls my name.
You are the vicious, venom hero.
You are a demon who breathes the scathed lies of those with ties with the devil, a snarling tongue of those who’ve hung around the wrong crowd for too long.
I gaze at the burning sun, half past one, almost done with this pledge. Standing over the edge, I’ll say it once and the whole world will listen.
The Gods will hear my words, my scream will tear the earth, the shriek will rip the skies, all the product of my cries.
I can see your ship, but it is too late, you’ll die a death of grief and hate. That is your fate, it will not change, and you’ll share my hurt, my love and pain.
"You are cursed, the flags shall never change."
And that is it, the deed is done, cut and slice my wretched tongue
And suddenly I fall at sonic speeds, flailing and screaming, pleading for freedom.
And a glimpse at the ship satisfies my life until the earth embraces my spine and I'm out like a light, end of the line, end of the road, end of the show, that’s just how it goes.
The ship's flag is black.

by #Chance
——————————— ѕтяιcтlу ιc ———————————
The Rainbow Phantasm
A child B o r n o f t h e S u n is something [NO MAN] may grasp
For his H e a r t burns with the ambivalence of an U n c o m i n g D a w n

~
Don't try to tell me awesome p o w e r can corrupt a person,
You haven't had enough to know what it's like.
You're just upset because you [ wish ] you were in my position.
Now nod your head because you know that I'm right.

J E H R I C O |Dystopian Crusader| F A U S T
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Re: A False Warrior ( )

Postby Sugarcake101 on Sat Dec 31, 2011 8:59 pm

This is beautiful. It almost reminds me of my father, (who thankfully I don't have to put up with anymore.) Every poem sends a different message through every mind. I love this. Keep up the great work(: I also love your writing style, and the words are just beyond beautiful.
Some say the world will end in Fire,
Some say in Ice,
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor Fire,
But if I had to Perish twice,
I think I know enough of Hate,
To say for Destruction Ice is also Great,
And would Suffice.

- Robert Frost. <3

Gir Loves You :3
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Re: A False Warrior ( )

Postby #Chance on Sun Jan 01, 2012 6:55 am

Sugarcake101 wrote:This is beautiful. It almost reminds me of my father, (who thankfully I don't have to put up with anymore.) Every poem sends a different message through every mind. I love this. Keep up the great work(: I also love your writing style, and the words are just beyond beautiful.


Thanks Sugar. I've been meaning to go in on your poems and comment, but I keep getting distracted with posting stuff. I'll do one of yours straight after this since it is fresh in my mind.

I'm sorry to hear that it reminded you of your father, sorry if it made you feel bad or anything like that. =c
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Re: A False Warrior ( )

Postby Eyeris on Tue Feb 07, 2012 4:32 am

U mad?

lol ignore that.

I actually really liked your poem. Your prose is driven and powerful. I think it is a very strong piece. :) Keep writing!
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Re: A False Warrior ( )

Postby Circa on Thu Feb 09, 2012 12:15 pm

I hope it is not too presumptuous to say that here you have constructed a beautiful juxtaposition of themes; between the symbolism of a ships flag signaling, and the craving for what seems to me as some kind of justice for a 'hero' afflicted by these animal traits. The rhyme structure is not too serious, but rewarding to the reader, and the diction that you chose is so vivid, i must admit that I often wish i had put such powerful language into my own work.

Or in a sentence... Well done; thanks for sharing, it was very much enjoyed.
Sweating doesn't do justice and little drops of salty water.
So tearing off my skin I feel my body burning up again.
Thought this coverless existence would leave me breathing or exposed
with no face to face with outside pain and burning are new skins
Searching for your friends! RIP OFF MY SKIN! TEAR OFF MY SKIN!
I feel me burning up again! -Moi
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