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--- Written by a preteen novelist, who lacks the knowledge of what a good storyline is.
--- Main character is a teenage female, who often possesses most of the same physical characteristics of the author. She also often is 'different' than the majority of her peer group.
--- Main character is also a MARY-SUE; either, she's perfect and can do no wrong, or she lacks personality entirely and is simply an author replacement.
--- Love blossoms everywhere for this Mary-Sue protagonist; many of the normal, flawed males quickly fall in love with her, even if she is relatively normal, which (she normally isn't).
--- Mary-Sue only notices one of her potential suitors, the male protagonist of the series, who immediately sees her as 'the only one'.
--- Their relationship is utterly perfect; if they ever fight, it's over who loves the other more.
--- Despite the overarching plot of the book series up to that point (we're still talking fanfic, kids, keep up) the male character wants to make all sorts of changes in his life to adjust to include (or even center around) Mary-Sue. Perhaps, if he was one of those hot guys who doesn't think there was such a thing as true love, well, she changes his mind.
--- If the guy already had a girlfriend or love interest, she (a) is killed, (b) becomes less perfect in her love interest's eyes, (c) becomes a traitor, or (d) receives a Gary-Stu OC as her true love. The last method is the humane way; the first and second are preferred.
--- To make allowances for the original plot, Mary-Sue is often a 'Chosen One' - even in series where her lover was already the Chosen One.
--- There are slight anomalies in the author's writing; plot devices or facts about the world in which the story is set don't seem to matter. (Example: in a Harry Potter fanfic, the characters might be able to Apparate in and out of Hogwarts, and extremely young characters might be allowed to join the Quiddich team, despite the fact that it is exceedingly rare for that to be allowed.)
--- Written by a preteen novelist, who lacks the knowledge of what a good storyline is.
I don't know about the first half, but S.M. doesn't seem to get that the focus of a character's life would not be love at that point.
--- Main character is a teenage female, who often possesses most of the same physical characteristics of the author. She also often is 'different' than the majority of her peer group.
Enter Bella Swan. She has the brown hair and eyes, full lips, and pale skin of her creator. She starts the story by being a pale girl from Phoenix, AZ. Not happening.
--- Main character is also a MARY-SUE; either, she's perfect and can do no wrong, or she lacks personality entirely and is simply an author replacement.
Bella lacks most important personality traits. She's a pushover. Her three predominant characteristics are that she (a) lacks the common sense to stay away from a vampire, (b) seems to be entirely selfless, and (c) is very clumsy. I put more effort into characterizing my characters' pets.
--- Love blossoms everywhere for this Mary-Sue protagonist; many of the normal, flawed males quickly fall in love with her, even if she is relatively normal, which (she normally isn't).
Three boys ask her to the girls' choice dance within a single day. I consider myself a rather pretty girl, and I've been asked on about as many dates this summer. By the same boy. Who happened to have been my boyfriend. ANYWAY. All the boys love Bella because she's so different and unique. Come on; she's from Arizona. That's not unique, that's boring. More to the point, no one ever asks her about what it's like there.
--- Mary-Sue only notices one of her potential suitors, the male protagonist of the series, who immediately sees her as 'the only one'.
Bella ignores all of the guys - except for the perfect Edward Cullen. She goes out of character by agreeing to hang out with him. Not that she has much character to leave behind in the first place.
--- Their relationship is utterly perfect; if they ever fight, it's over who loves the other more.
True life. If that couple had been any more soppy, I would have had to buy one of those damned Sham-WOWs.
--- Despite the overarching plot of the book series up to that point (we're still talking fanfic, kids, keep up) the male character wants to make all sorts of changes in his life to adjust to include (or even center around) Mary-Sue. Perhaps, if he was one of those hot guys who doesn't think there was such a thing as true love, well, she changes his mind.
Edward Cullen is a vampire. He should have ignored Bella and moved on with his life. He didn't, because some stupid, clumsy girl is actually worth his time, apparently.
--- If the guy already had a girlfriend or love interest, she (a) is killed, (b) becomes less perfect in her love interest's eyes, (c) becomes a traitor, or (d) receives a Gary-Stu OC as her true love. The last method is the humane way; the first and second are preferred.
None of the other vampires even affect their relationship, except for Rosalie being the token hater of Bella (who eventually reforms to like her). Most of the vamp girls already have their true loves, Emmet and Jasper. The werewolf girls are the same way. The human girls are too imperfect. The slutty vampire girls from Alaska that show up... well, they're sluts in Edward's eyes. Bella has no competition.
--- To make allowances for the original plot, Mary-Sue is often a 'Chosen One' - even in series where her lover was already the Chosen One.
Bella has this magical power that prevents Edward from reading her mind. This trait becomes a love-activated shield for her companions after she is turned into a vampire.
--- There are slight anomalies in the author's writing; plot devices or facts about the world in which the story is set don't seem to matter. (Example: in a Harry Potter fanfic, the characters might be able to Apparate in and out of Hogwarts, and extremely young characters might be allowed to join the Quiddich team, despite the fact that it is exceedingly rare for that to be allowed.)
Thousands of examples. I'll list two key ones.--- The werewolves in Twilight have this weird 'imprinting' power, which basically makes it so that the wolf imprints on the girl who is most likely to produce kiddos with him. It's for this reason that one dude didn't imprint on his girlfriend, but instead on her sister - because the girlfriend wasn't capable of having kids.
Anyway, Jacob imprints on Reneesme, the child of Edward and Bella. She is a half-vampire female, which means that she shouldn't be able to produce children. So what's the deal? That's plain idiotic!
--- Here's a fun one.
A vampire, by nature, is a dead creature, which lacks blood. In Twilight, the vamps have blood, but it doesn't move around, since there is no heartbeat to push it through his or her veins.
In "Breaking Dawn", the last book, Bella and Edward get it on (which results in the aforementioned child, which is very poorly named). If there is no heartbeat to pump blood, how does Edward get it up?
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fumeii wrote:3. Or, as well as the most obvious of all, Edward is, and will always be, a fairy.
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Fantasygirl wrote:Thats it for now. If I have more I'll update my list.
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