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NOTICE: This topic has been judged. Please see the bottom of this post and any new posts for additional information. One of our users (thanks, Kyouko) suggested we have a poetry competition. I agreed that it would be a fine idea. On that note, some ground rules! When does the contest start? Now. Wh...

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Life is good.

If there were people who acted as a driving force behind this, other than myself, I would certainly be interested in getting things rolling again.

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There is nothing wrong with submitting your own work. Rather than making you feel arrogant, it should make you feel confident in opening your mind to other people and allowing them to share in your creativity. With that said, I think there are some things that can be done to improve this thread: 1. ...

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I think this is one of those good ideas that will be difficult to get off the ground. However, in the meantime, people are welcome to submit ideas for roleplays they'd like to be changed into adventure-style and how they think they could progress.

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I think she was fairly clear on how love hurts. It is called Stockholm syndrome; the pathology of the abused. They think it is love, but it is really abuse. I don't particularly like the poem in how it is framed (flow, word choice, layout), but the concept is admirable.

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Within the transient security of a light-carved tunnel of metallic flesh, Autun stands, listening to the cavalcade of havoc resonating around him. Grinding claws and flapping wings, it is deafening and unstoppable. Although he notes – and barely – Tage’s protestations, aggressively arguing that the...

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I don’t know why, but this meaningless little nothing keeps finding its way back into my thoughts. I don’t consider it a poem, but it doesn’t qualify as anything else. Maybe it is an emanation of the soul that simply cannot find proper words, so it uses them out of context to create a feeling rather...

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The Duchy of Rains Rain pours ceremonially down from the sky, already in mourning for the monumental news to descend upon the amicable Duchy. A reporter stands in front of the grim, gray silhouette of the castle at Auvergne, holding an earphone to hear head and gazing uncertainly into the camera. T...

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I originally posted this in the So You Think You Can Write... A Song? competition, but am adding it here to keep things organized. The pathetic singing I made of it is available here . Bad Dream I flip on the tv. There's a homeless child with a crooked smile, playing with crippled hands. A heart...

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I originally posted this in the So You Think You Can Write ... Poetry? competition, but am adding it here to keep things organized. Awkward Emotion I like to sit and talk, On all the ways we vary. Till one of you point out, A loosened shoelace in my life. Tie it up, tie it up, up up up. Tie it up, t...

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Perhaps you should've split it into two separate posts, each in the right forum, and just linked the two topics via the URL BBCode.

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Yoda is a poet, now, and forgot what punctuation is for? I think if you add in some periods, question marks, and exclamation points where necessary, this will improve a lot. There are also places where it seems unnecessary to switch common word order, as it only makes a poem that would otherwise hav...

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This seems like rambling. ;/ Not necessarily bad, but I can't put my finger on any specific point being made. I'm not even sure if it is poetry, although it doesn't seem to qualify for anything more specific. Just a gush of thought.

And yes, it does snow every night. :)

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Moving this to writing, as it doesn't seem to be poetry, but more of a short story.

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You did ask for a comment. Honestly? This isn't very good. There is no construction, not much in meter, and a subject matter that is entirely too emo for me to digest. The last line indicates to me how you will react to anyone who comments on here, so I am preparing my bullet-proof vest for the insu...

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Are you aspiring to be the Marijuana-advocating Ginsburg of internet poetry? As far as construction goes, you need to add in some more grammar. The only word you capitalized is the brand of beer. o_o; Then again, the lack of construction does go with the topic.

<Shrugs.>

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In light of Matthias' capitalization quanderies, I felt it would be helpful to supply you all with something more authoritative on the topic. See this article, Capitalization in poetry , and see if it helps. By-and-large, most of the people on this site are using capitalization correctly when writin...

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Moving this to the Writing forum, as it doesn't really seem to be poetry. However, from the little bit I read, it seems very well-constructed and interesting.

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You can remove the periods from the three quoted phrases where they're used, as they don't flow with the first and are unnecessary. Also, this line "I'll keep her close past I grow old." doesn't make sense to me, but perhaps I'm reading it wrong. I'll keep her past close as I grow old woul...

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Why is it that those who ask for help rarely get it? Perhaps the lack of necessary key-words or the idea that people would rather read poetry because it reaches out to them, as opposed to proof-checking it. I would rather see separation for verses, instead of adding a blank line buffer. I would say ...

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