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The story of my life when I was in my late eighteen’s. I think you mean, at the end of your year of being 18 but I think its just better to say you were 18 or say in your “late teens.” It’s a sad sad story, but it’s true. Comma after the first “sad.” It starts out in the dark corner of a club after...

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Woah there Shinigami, I don't critique here because I wan't to pick up on every single detail and whatever else. I do it because...well I signed up volantarily to do this. If you didn't want me to be honest, then you could have asked for no comments in such a way. I've only said what I've learnt and...

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I would think being so familiar with the ROLE play forums, you'll know how to spell it.

Or maybe theres a pun on those words, that I don't quite understand.

Anyway, welcome.

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Maybe. Word still sucks. >_>

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Ok then its "discrete" I just wanted to make sure that "discreet" wasn't another word, I wasn't aware of. I thought you meant "discrete" but since Word was F-ing up, I didn't know. V_V I understand with grammar spellng but I've always been a good english student and I l...

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Ok, this is for the first post. ^_^ A tall elve was making his way Should it be “efl?” Or this another term, I’m not familiar with? This first paragraph has a few comma splices. Let me point them out. He had very dark brown hair and eyes, but a pale complexion, and by the shape of his eyes and ears ...

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Not gonna say you were taught wrong, but in fictional works, its not done like that. As far as I've seen. I've taken a few creative writing courses in college and thats how we were taught. I understand what you guys have been taught, which is a different case. If you are quoting/citing something fro...

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Meia, I have to disagree with your last one... "Had he been so as as a kid" doesn't work, but "Had he been so arrogant as a kis?" definitely works, because he's comparing the kid to how he was as a kid. I'm not sure what you mean here. I think you're agreeing with me and Microso...

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Jerald stood at leaning on the door with his arms crossed, “It’s been slow, there haven’t been any wars for years and nothing big has happened. That sentence needs a bit of rewording, with dialogue too. Not sure how you want to say it, so I’ll leave that up to you. The part where you say “stood at ...

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First thing I want to say is, spell check. XD Some of them are just typos, but I don’t want to assume that this is all written in a hurry, because there are quite a few spelling mistakes here. I’ll point out the first few ones, including the grammatical mistakes and leave the rest up to you. A man w...

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Alright, I'll comment after I finish every post, though its kind of hard to say where it ends since I copied it all into word. >_> whoops...gotta go and mark it now.

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This might take me awhile. I'll read everything but only offer suggestions on parts that haven't been commented on.

Just know that I'm reading. o.o;

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Gah, now I gotta make sure I remember. XD

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Interesting. Welcome back.

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Well I'm a moderator of a section like that in another forum so, I wouldn't have no problem with that. It might also give me the chance to be more active around here. XD I've been slacking.

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You interpret things to be a bashing of the vets or some kind of insulting of vets. You say that the reason why I tell you, you're getting bent out of shape is because you're disagreeing with me, you say that everything that I say is being bitchy and trying to put this site down. Those are your usua...

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These are all on the main pages, once you click a topic though you can navigate out of the area, but here are the areas I found: General Faction Info Asian Nation (it seems to happen off and on, when I first went in there, it dissappeared but then I left and came back and it was there, then left and...

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Nope, tis all good.

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What areas? And I've noticed that problem when using Internet Explorer. For some reason, it seems to think my width tag is comparing to the entire container model, and not the relative model. ~_~ Ahh, alright, it does say the forum would look better using Firefox, I think. So it's probably just me ...

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Well you weren't in the chat now were you? Since you know him by name you can talk to him or whatever yourself. He said that Angel called him a n00b, though I didn't see it myself, thats why he kept carrying on in the topic like he was a n00b. There is no bitchiness, just saying it as it is. I didn'...