Lady Ethereal wrote:I would say that this roleplay is still in its beginning stage and would gradually grow into an interesting story if managed correctly. Regarding about the introduction, it is the usually seen plot which would be about a magical object, its protectors and the people who have a say against it. In this matter, it lacks a certain spark that would make it different from the other fantasy adventure stories rampant around the site. Since, the storyline would be predictable. Yet, I do believe that the GM would have a few tricks to make this an engaging tale. The next point to be discussed would be the characters. They lack details to make them concrete in terms of the mind. It would be good to add more information. There is no need to be excessive but enough to understand why they came to be like that or what is their purpose. This would give them more depth than your typical archetypes. The posts are short and ambiguous for my liking; however they do get the points across. I would advise to challenge yourselves to write in further detail to make it much like a movie being seen than a monotonous musing. Adding to that, do check out for the spellings and grammars. It might send wrong interpretations when read. Overall, the story needs development and so do the characters. However, these are just my opinions and it could change as the story unfolds. In any case, have fun roleplaying and I do like the storyline. It only needs more work! Keep it up! ^_^