Kurokiku wrote:Before I begin, ignore the numerical score. The rubric is intended for RPs with IC activity, not concept reviews, so the number itself is artificially low. As for the concept itself, you are running a slight risk of being passed off as "another high school RP" or "another kids-with-abilities RP." this is not to say that DoR is this, merely that, as a premise alone and without any plot evidence to reference, it is not the most original. Some of the tweaks that have been added, such as the location (I've never seen a high school RP in a jungle) and the inclusion of Hindu mythology/religious references hint that the RP, if started, would be a departure from those more typical plots, but I cannot make that determination with certainty. The intro page itself was well-written, though there are a few grammatical errors that may have been caught with another read-through or two. The RP is very well-presented aesthetically, and neatly organized, both pluses. If you were looking to restart the RP more successfully, I would suggest an interest check first, and possibly also a bit of straying away from character slots. It's one thing to sort by year, but unless the inclusion of the school "royalty" is absolutely necessary, for example, it might behoove you to leave the creation a little more open-ended. On the other side of the spectrum, I'm not actually sure if there are any supernatural powers in the RP or not. The Djinn suggest yes, but the intro does not seem to indicate whether or not students can have such powers on their own. A little more guidance in the logistics area may attract people who were otherwise unsure if their idea for a character would be a good "fit" for the game.

Absenthia wrote:It is extremely hard to judge a roleplay that has no IC (in character) activity, therefore the number on the review will be low. But, that does not automatically make this a bad roleplay. This roleplay is perhaps unique for it's genre because, they do not normally incorporate the mythology and legends of a particular religion (this one being Hindu). This aids this roleplay and gives it something of an edge, not to mention the hardships students would face in a subtropical jungle where the school is located. This is simply because in addition to the students you would be fighting, your character would more than likely be fighting off the elements, not to mention running the risk of getting lost. This one had promise, though I could not particularly say what the plot was. There did not seem to be a complication of climax present, but this may have been planned to be introduced through the development of the characters in the roleplay. In short, this roleplay is unique for it's genre, and had a some interesting ideas in it's world for those who wished to participate.