Please Don't

Please don’t define me

by that which is limited

to the material

You allow to enter

Your consciousness

and Please don’t measure me

by a ruler as short as

Your imagination

but most of all -

Please don’t

invalidate the existence

of my feelings

because You lack the ability

to understand them.

Hey I'm Rulke and I tend to review things like this rather than just comment. I warn you now I can be a little harsh or very depending. My first thoughts are this seems more like a rant and doesn't flow like a poem. It appears more like a stream of conciousness, which can work but I shall explain my thoughts further.

To elaborate I understand message trying to deliver, I'm just not all that happy with how ya choose to give us it. For instance it doesn't come across as a poem as it can flow all together in one sentence. Perhaps this was effect you were looking for. But to me it bothers as there no reason for it to be split into lines. Another issue I have is it doesn't try pull me in, it's basically navelgazing and doesn't ring any of my emotions. You don't try capture us with a metaphor or language technique, if ya wish to speak about this fine, but please do so in a way that the readers enjoy it just as much.

The main issue with this is it 'tells' everything and doesn't allow us to see. It's easy to shout out how you feel, but a little subtly and ambiguity works wonders. By outright yelling the message. I becomes less a poem and more soapbox to yell your feelings. You have to remember there will be others reading this and they want to feel what you feel, they can't do so if you spoil the message and insist on telling us everything.

What I liked though was your word choice, it's not juvenile and really shows you've a good lexicon in your head. They're not hastily chosen and they work the logic of this poem. I also liked the message, even if it was yelled at me.

Overall I say remember the guidelines of 'Show don't tell'

Hope this helps :).

Thank you (:
I shall keep that all in mind when I decide to write another.